Birthday Present For My Mother
Jan 14, 2015 22:00
Two months ago, I forgot to prepare my mother's birthday present.
And after one month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.
Since I want to give my mother a present at that time, I bought a SSD today.
Of course, my mother doesn't want such a SSD, but she previously said "I wish I could have had my laptop.."
Therefore, I decided to compose a laptop using my old PC components and the SSD.
I'm sure she likes this laptop! :D
And after one month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.
Since I want to give my mother a present at that time, I bought a SSD today.
Of course, my mother doesn't want such a SSD, but she previously said "I wish I could have had my laptop.."
Therefore, I decided to compose a laptop using my old PC components and the SSD.
I'm sure she likes this laptop! :D
No. 1 Zöe's correction
- Two months ago, I forgot to prepare my mother's birthday present.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- And after one month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.
- And after one a month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.
- Since I want to give my mother a present at that time, I bought a SSD today.
- Since I want to give my mother a present at that time, I bought a SSD today.
- Of course, my mother doesn't want such a SSD, but she previously said "I wish I could have had my laptop.."
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Of course, my mother doesn't want such a SSD, but she previously said "I wish I could have had my laptop..I wish I had a laptop"
This sounds a bit weird. If you're quoting her word for word this is fine but if you're paraphrasing then the correction would be helpful.
- Therefore, I decided to compose a laptop using my old PC components and the SSD.
- Therefore, I decided to compose make a laptop using my old PC components parts and the SSD.
- I'm sure she likes this laptop!
- I'm sure she'll likes this laptop!
- :D
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
kanotown
Thank you so much for correcting me! (*´▽｀*)
Thank you so much for correcting me! (*´▽｀*)
No. 2 's correction
- And after one month from now, I will go back to my hometown for some reason.
- For some reason, I will be going back to my hometown one month from now.
kanotown
Thank you so much for your correction !(^-^)
Thank you so much for your correction !(^-^)